Pesbo Pearl Pirie's Poetry Journal ([info]pearlformance) wrote,
@ 2008-03-26 10:30:00
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Spring
A response to the One Single Impression prompt of spring, which is still a good month away here.

The ice pellets pick away at the glass again, the small sun of a cat on my lap, moaning should I shift, then when I accept her there, she trots off. Finally the sidewalks are shiny from the rain earlier this morning, not from ice, but the temperature is yo-yoing around freezing.

more snow coming,
post equinox sun –
spray of orange peel


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OSI
(Anonymous)
2008-03-26 08:34 pm UTC (link)
Today I heard about the snow coming. I'm grateful for poetry like yours that transforms such news into art.

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OSI
(Anonymous)
2008-03-26 08:36 pm UTC (link)
Today I heard about the snow coming. I'm grateful for poetry like yours that transforms such news into art.
www.sandycarlson.net

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from Patricia (a/k/a Roswila)
(Anonymous)
2008-03-26 11:03 pm UTC (link)
Very nice! Love the image in the last line.

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(Anonymous)
2008-03-27 12:54 am UTC (link)
Lovely work! Vividly visual!
http://firsttumblewords.blogspot.com

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Spring
(Anonymous)
2008-03-27 11:39 am UTC (link)
I like how you mix the two seasons together with the snow and orange peel. The image of a ripe orange with its peel around it is so tropical.

Pam at www.coosacreek.org/amputated (Amputated Moon)

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(Anonymous)
2008-03-27 11:49 pm UTC (link)
this is marvelous

Christine at Quietpaths

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(Anonymous)
2008-03-28 02:13 am UTC (link)
Love how the last line adds a squirt of flavour and colour to the white world.

Lovely write!

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[info]auragem
2008-03-28 02:14 am UTC (link)
Love how the last line adds a squirt of flavour and colour to the white world.

Lovely write!

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paisley
(Anonymous)
2008-03-29 02:11 pm UTC (link)
not very often do i find poetry that appeals to the sense of smell as does your line about the orange peels... very delicious.....

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(Anonymous)
2008-03-29 02:32 pm UTC (link)
Great late march haiku. You must live near me!

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[info]gardenpath.wordpress.com
2008-03-29 02:32 pm UTC (link)
Great late march haiku. You must live near me!

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Haiku
(Anonymous)
2008-03-29 09:58 pm UTC (link)
Nicely done.

Regarding the cat in the lap: Don't you just hate it when they do that. You decide to give in, re-adjust yourself and what your doing and off they go only to come back again when you're busy.

Raven
http://ravensviews.blogspot.com/

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hmmm
(Anonymous)
2008-03-31 11:03 am UTC (link)
I feel the peel.

The text starting around
"..ice pellets pick away again.."
would trim into a lovely short, too.

--JK

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